Snapshot Poem 27 September 02006

wasps mating?

this morning smells of cinnamon,
of nutmeg and nostalgia, the red
sting of striped wasps and afternoon
falling from the sky like maple

like oak, a yellow day, tasting
of lemons and the sharp songs
of sparrows, a round day, an oval
day, an egg day, the day takes shape

around me but i am an absence today
i am not here, i am not there, the day
passes brightly around this vacancy
an egg-shaped emptiness, yolkless

heartless, a finality here where there
is nothing but dreams, floods, refugees
thousands of lost children, pets, these
two wasps mating on the fountain

thinking not of drowning, no discussion
no political debate, no faceted visions
no fear of the future, only this essential
desperate and glorious gesture

So, I write this — post this — and then think, wait a minute…

Do wasps mate? Do wasps have Queens, like bees?

I have this all wrong, haven’t I?

So what are they doing?

11 responses to “Snapshot Poem 27 September 02006”

  1. Birds do it
    Bees do
    even wasps upon your knee
    do it
    wasps do it….
    and here is some photographic reassurance for you!
    http://images.google.com/images?q=wasps+mating&hl=en&btnG=Search+Images

  2. OMG, I’m not really going to say this — but, I’m a guy.
    I wonder if they smoke . . .
    Actually, I love the images! And, know the feelings.

  3. the red
    sting of striped wasps and afternoon
    falling from the sky like maple
    like oak, a yellow day, tasting
    of lemons and the sharp songs
    of sparrows, a round day, an oval
    day, an egg day, the day takes shape
    around me but i am an absence today
    These are my favorite lines. Such a great idea to rearrange the senses in honor of nature and nature’s funny little creatures. Thanks for noticing those nasty wasps!

  4. Excellent! I like the picture, too. And your other posts are fine!

  5. I loved your description of an egg shaped day, sunny and yellow, yummy!

  6. Oh excellent, really well done. I love the first two stanzas especially. And the picture is lovely too. Wasps definitely mate, they get up to it in our backyard all the time (we have lots of fallen apples this time of year, so they’re everywhere).

  7. Who cares if wasps mate or not, it felt so true in your writing I believed it. And what a beautiful poem, a true feast of the senses!
    My favourite lines, “an oval
    day, an egg day, the day takes shape
    around me but i am an absence today
    i am not here, i am not there, the day
    passes brightly around this vacancy
    an egg-shaped emptiness, yolkless
    heartless”
    Wonderful!

  8. This is a beautiful image:
    an egg-shaped emptiness, yolkless
    I think this resonated with me so much, because you did such a wonderful job illustrating how glorious the day was, the sounds, textures, oh gosh, the sky like maple! And then you feel with the narrator, experience the disappointment with him/her, as he/she realizes that amidst all that life, he/she is empty. Excellent.

  9. Very enjoyable read — favorite line:
    “afternoon
    falling from the sky like maple”
    All best, Nic

  10. Oh, thank you all, so much — such encouragement! This was a fun prompt; a good reminder of what poems are for.

  11. I especially enjoyed your first stanza. Very creative!

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