a poet’s notebook

Here | snapshot poem

Once again, the lines are too long for the format, so I’ve done it as an image (click to bring it up larger.) The text, with broken lines, is below the cut:

Here: poem

snowflake

ReadWritePoemThis week was "a novel prompt":
Make a list of 10 or so words – the final words from chapters of a book
of your choice – and then write a 10- to 20-line poem using those
words.

My words: you, release, today, transformation, asleep, anymore, language, grace, rest, religion, here, palm, from Eat, Pray, Love: One Woman’s Search for Everything Across Italy, India and Indonesia.

I’m also, as you can see, still playing with line lengths.

Birch trees thicken with snow; the landscape out this window is sugared.
Everything retreats to silence. I don’t love you
anymore. It’s all hardened, inside these thickening limbs, these stiffening
joints. Hardened to ice, inflexible and cold.

I’ve become brittle, sharp, and empty. My dreams are wisps, ghostly
and vacant of feeling. They pass through me like
breath on a freezing day. There is no space in me for religion, for rest,
for grace; no hope of transformation. It is all

illusion. You, my passion, my love: illusion. This body — I stare at the palm
of my hand — illusion. I am always asleep.
This language, so thin, so transparent: illusion. I release you now. Today,
I release you. You, this day, this release: illusion.

5 responses to “Here | snapshot poem”

  1. paisley Avatar

    i am working just this moment on a piece about the hole inside of us,,, the one that we fill with love or people or drugs or money or…… yes,, that hole.. the very one that reared its ugly little head in this piece… this was so well done..

  2. Tumblewords Avatar

    I like the line breaks. And the words. It’s strange how empty spaces turn hard. Very nice!

  3. Linda Jacobs Avatar

    I love this! It reads so well and the longer line lengths do it justice.

  4. slynne Avatar

    This is really beautiful. I love that you opened it with the vision of birch trees. They are such a strongly rooted poetic image, and then end with illusion.
    This makes me think of so many illusions:
    love, beauty, self, relationships, art. So great.
    thank you!

  5. gautami Avatar

    You poem is sheer beauty!
    BTW, the URL option is back in blogger!

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