wednesday again
winter storm
warningraccoon tracks
around
the frozen pondfish deeply
sleeping still
insomniasquires me
long lit
nights & shortdim days
pressed warm
against methis dog’s
paws twitch
& busyin the garden
one tailless
squirrelsparrows
pine siskins
black-cappedchickadees
piliated
woodpeckerraven boasting
from atop
the tallestspruce ice
on tree
limbs iceon mine
sleep
a clumsyskate
on thick
rippledsurfaces
and now
the snow
Snapshot 12 January 02005
8 responses to “Snapshot 12 January 02005”
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I like a lot.
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I do too. Its fragmented lines & barely linked images capture perfectly the drift back & forth across the boundary between sleeping & waking.
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your poetry always speaks to me…love the clean words and images
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Very good poem but is it me or did you change the shape of it ? I thought it look another way last night. I could be wrong.
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Lovely imagery. I like the flow of one thought into the next.
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You have raccoons? I don’t believe we have any of those up here … but all the rest, yup, and they are what keeps this death-freeze at bay, I tell ya. There is nothing so warm-heartening as seeing a flock of black-capped chickadees swoop in to strip the black spruce pine trees in the front yard of whatever it is they are eating, right in the middle of the deep-freeze when everything is frozen in place like statues in a creepy, hushed museum. Or, maybe that should be: mausoleum? 🙂
Lovely poem, SB. You’re my winter inspiration. -
The poem’s visual structure matches the tone of the poem and the feeling of a quiet winter’s day.
Lovely. Thank you for sharing it with us. -
Cathy — you are quite right, I broke all the rules and revised, repeatedly, after the first posting. This one took awhile to find.
Kate — I was told that there were no raccoons in Juneau, but there was at least one — I looked up one day to find it staring at me through the skylight. I hope it was not an escaped pet who could not care for itself.
Thank you all for the comments on this piece; I’ve been in need of encouragement lately, and you have provided.
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