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Snapshot 29 September 02004

when the muse goes
what is left?
      — only autumn

      

UPDATE:  Hmm, maybe I could make this a little love poem:

when you go
what is left?
      — only autumn

      

What do you think?

Andrew suggests:

when he goes
what is left?
      — only autumn

      

Patia offers:

when you go
what is left?
      — only love

      

From Cindy:

when he goes
what is left?
      — dirty dishes

      

From Roger:

when they go
what is left?
      — tranquility

      

From Liz Kirby:

When Autum goes
what is left?
      — Another season.

      

Cathy has done something a little different, using my poem as the first stanza of a new piece:

when the muse goes
what is left?
      — only autumn

And from there-
you’ll let the worries
fall with the leaves.

      

Dave, following Cathy’s lead, offers:

when the muse goes
what is left?
      — only autumn
each morning the once-
free leaves of grass
made to rime
by frost.

      

From Patrick:

only autumn
as you go
comes winter

      

From Kalamity:

When the muse goes
with the crows
what is left?
— only autumn
cool weather,
leaves and feathers

      

From mjones:

Look, the tree is red!
Look!
           My son is enraptured.
Autumn needs no muse.

      

Have we begun another collaborative poem dance?  Crows is my favorite post ever; let’s do it again!  Use at least one line from a previous poem; leave your poem in the comments (or email me); and I will bring it up to add to the dance.

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9 responses to “Snapshot 29 September 02004”

  1. Patia Avatar

    I like it.
    Or,
    when you go
    what is left?
    — only love
    I suppose that’s boring.

  2. cindy Avatar
    cindy

    When he goes
    what is left?
    –dirty dishes

  3. Sugarfused Avatar

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  4. Roger Collett Avatar
    Roger Collett

    when they go
    what is left?
    –tranquility

  5. Cathy Avatar

    This what I came up with
    {yours}
    When the Muse goes
    what is left
    –only autumn
    And from there-
    you’ll let the worries
    fall with the leaves.
    (my part)

  6. Dave Avatar

    [a punful experiment]
    when the muse goes
    what is left?
    only autumn.
    each morning the once-
    free leaves of grass
    made to rime
    by frost.

  7. patrick mcmanus Avatar
    patrick mcmanus

    hi Sharon I enjoy all this -here’s a try
    only autumn
    as you go
    comes winter
    patrick

  8. Kalamity Avatar

    When the muse goes
    with the crows
    what is left?
    — only autumn
    cool weather,
    leaves and feathers

  9. mjones Avatar

    Look, the tree is red!
    Look!

    My son is enraptured.

    Autumn needs no muse.

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