the string has broken
i pick up the beads
of my lifethey are dissonant
discordant
there is no harmony herewas there ever a pattern?
some have fallen
into the gratei’ll never retrieve them
they are rolling down
a long culvertit is dark here, unnavigable
i am lost
listen, the beads are rattlingpick up this one, this one
place them on the paper
one, then another. another.these words on this page.
one, then another. another.
was there ever a pattern?these poems fall through
the grate, they roll down
a long culvertthey rattle against the dark
a poet’s notebook
snapshot poem 07 november 02007
15 responses to “snapshot poem 07 november 02007”
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well, of course, I love this one!
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It is evocative poetry as far as I can see. I could see the beads rattling…
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“was there ever a pattern?
some have fallen
into the grate
i’ll never retrieve them”
Indeed! I love the existential question you pose twice – was there ever a pattern? Very evocative. -
I really like this, it’s clever, evocative, well done.
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🙂 I love the pattern of short lines in orderly three, bead-links down the page.
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I like the way it rolls out on the tongue and rattles to the floor. 3tu
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“They rattle against the dark”
I was stuck on this line, it evoked so many different things in my mind.
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The bead and grate images are…great. I like hearing the rattling. As I sit at a public computer with rattling keyboard, I can (even better)hear the imagery.
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I like this very much. I sure can identify with your words. Which poem did you chose? Great job!
Also your site is awesome!!!!
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Really wonderful. I love the connection between poems and beads.
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Interesting! Lost, dark, mysterious and wondering. Very nice.
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Wow, do I love this poem…and these three lines especially moved me:
it is dark here, unnavigable
i am lost
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Love the comparison of beads to poetry! It’s fresh and quirky. ~Linda
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I love this. Complex as a shifting bead curtain parting to show the beyond.
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I’m awe of people like you who can weave such a poem from a prompt and photo.
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